Phoebe’s persuasive writing

Just like yesterday, a letter about the housing development. To say that Phoebe is upset would be an understatement. She isn’t taking any prisoners!

Liss Junior School

Hillbrow Road

Liss

Hampshire

GU33 7LQ

Thursday 31st March 2011

Dear Mr Burford,

I am writing to protest against the plans of building a housing estate on the wasteland behind our school. However, we could use it as a sports area for the following reasons I will outline below.

Surely, you would not want our school in front of a housing estate? If we used the space as a sports area, we could extend the playground, as we desperately need to, as I’m sure you will agree. In the sports area it would be a good idea to have a various ball games such as Football and Netball. Around the area you could include a running track that we most definitely need, as you and everyone knows. Isn’t it obvious we need this extra space?

Secondly, I would just like to make clear the reasons that the housing estate would be unacceptable and very unpleasant. Firstly, when the builders are working on the houses they will have to take the fence down. And when they leave for the day, someone will come and destroy our school. Next, the houses when the houses are built there might be ‘yobs’ living there, so there is more of a chance of vandalism. Only a madman will disagree!

I have lots more to complain the houses that it would take up 3 A3 pages. Can’t you see what needs to be done? I will keep on protesting until one person gives in.

I hope you have listened and act on everything my letter has discussed about because I’ll expect a letter back in at least a week. Or I may even take these developers to court.

Yours sincerely

 Phoebe

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1 Response to Phoebe’s persuasive writing

  1. Clare Dove says:

    An excellent persuasive letter! I would be trembling in my shoes if I received a letter like that!

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